Feedback from other groups

Positives- Other groups thought that our cinematography like our camera angles and shot types are good and varied.

Generally people liked it.

Negatives- We have found from the feedback of other groups that one negative is that there is to much time opening and closing doors.

There were also mixed reviews about our music some saying we needed more to build tension, however some commented saying it was good.

Credits and titles could have been made clearer or better.

Final Cut

Credits

During todays lesson we are adding our opening credits to our thriller film 'A fool's paradise'. This is proving difficult as we cannot simply add the text without the background. We will focus on removing the back ground this lesson, leaving just the text over the top of the footage of the film.

Sound for our thriller.

We are finding making music for our Thriller 'A fool's paradise' to be very hard as there are only a few different sounds on Garage band; the software we are using.
Despite this we have managed to make a good part of the sound, and have agreed that subtle background music will suit our thriller best.
Our Ident will have a windy sound effect over the top of it, to elaborate the motion the ident is doing. In this the Clock is swinging on a noose, being pushed by wind. We will also add a subtle 'ticking' noise over the top of this, if possible.
The diegetic sound in our clips can be very eary, especially after the second dream. The diegetic sound here makes the house the protagonist lives in seem very desolate and lonesome, adding great effect to the protagonists story; that he is lonely.

Sound for our thriller.

We are finding making music for our Thriller 'A fool's paradise' to be very hard as there are only a few different sounds on Garage band; the software we are using.
Despite this we have managed to make a good part of the sound, and have agreed that subtle background music will suit our thriller best.
Our Ident will have a windy sound effect over the top of it, to elaborate the motion the ident is doing. In this the Clock is swinging on a noose, being pushed by wind. We will also add a subtle 'ticking' noise over the top of this, if possible.
The diegetic sound in our clips can be very eary, especially after the second dream. The diegetic sound here makes the house the protagonist lives in seem very desolate and lonesome, adding great effect to the protagonists story; that he is lonely.

Technique(s) we could have used.

T2-54 Slow motion.

They used slow motion in a part of there opening sequence. we thought this was affective as it slowed it down and made us focus on it for longer.
We would have liked to use this in some of our dreams but we did not have enough time remaining to do it.

Summarizing Feedback

We agree that some of the sound needs to be edited and that there is too much time focused on opening doors. Next week we will be making the music and editing the sound so that the scream isn't as loud etc. we also need to finish doing our credits.

Feedback from T2-51

• Good use of different camera shots and angles
• Flashbacks were clearly shown
• the editing was good as well as the sound as it flowed nicely and created suspense.
• It was clear who the antagonist and protagonist were.
• There is a point when walking out the door, the sound needs to join up.
• The diagetic and non diagetic sound worked well together. 
• Other then that is was brill.  :D 

Feedback From T2-52

We really liked this opening and thought it was really effective. We liked the sound and the flashbacks and the way that it all linked together. It was really mysterious in working out whether the main character we saw was the protagonist or antagonist because when we saw him writing in his notebook after looking at the newspaper , he looked like the protagonist, but when he went home and locked the doors as well as seeing he couldn't get the crime out of his head it made us think he was the antagonist, which made it all the more suspenseful for the target audience as we really wanted to see what was going to happen next.
The micro elements really built up the suspense and tension for us, as well as making us feel even more sorry for the main character because he looked and you could feel his isolation.

Feedback from T2-53

The overall project is good and the intention of the piece is clear. The shots were varied and creative which allowed the audience to stay interested. The sound of the girl screaming was also very valuable in creating an eerie atmosphere and to help represent the story line. 

To improve this we would suggest less time focused on the 'opening of the doors' shot. It seemed too long and it looses the tension which is trying to be built up in this clip.

The clip used thriller characteristics and it was clearly shown that the story line was based on the murder of a girl in which the protagonist was the murderer.

feedback from T2-54

It was brilliant. Difficult to criticize.

The sequence met pretty much all of the thriller conventions. 

We like the shots because they made the footage continuous and made perfect sense.

Although, if we had to criticize one thing, the only thing you could improve is how the music is introduced with immediate effect which would have sounded better if it faded into the sequence.

Comments from 49

The opening was very good, but a bit long winded as there was a lot of time focused on the opening of doors, the girls scream was also very piercing which was not too realist and through headphones hurts a bit.
The overall plot was clear but having the bit with the girl being slightly transparent meant that it was had to tell what was going on.

Narrative focus' round murder, this is clear through sound and cuts of tied up girl.
Weakness is that the guy cannot remember what he wants to and is having dreams about it.
The protagonist is not seen in peril, but is seen suffering slightly with his thoughts.

Rough Cut: Thriller Opening Sequence.

This is our rough cut of our thriller opening sequence. All the clips are edited and together in the right sequence and timing, the ident is on there and we have used motion key to move part of the image on the logo and part of the music is on there.
What we need to do is put the credits on there and also finish off the music by creating the tune or melody on Garage Band.
We are really pleased with what we have achieved so far. The story line flows well and we think the match on actions work really well. the music that is on it so far is also good as it matches the mood of our opening. The ticking sound that we added in sounds like the clock which carries on through the dream and gets louder when in the dream, which works well as it carries on the sound from reality into the dream.

In the next lesson we will be asking our class peers on what they think of our thriller opening sequence so far and getting feedback off them. We can then use their opinions to improve our thriller if need be.

Deadlines

Monday 7th- 9am- filming deadline
Wednesday 9th- 12:20- Rough cut deadline
Thursday 10th- Watching other rough cuts- offering advice ect.
Wednesday 16th- 12:20 - Final cut deadline
Monday 21st - 9am- draft evaluation due in via email.